Sunday, March 14, 2010

murmuring ...

tanka


lips here, there, there too
murmur becomes our safe word
i surrender it
my body watered by lust
longs for asphyxiation


mia

3/14

promptluv ~ http://onesingleimpression.blogspot.com/

26 comments:

  1. A powerful last line. Nicely done.

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  2. The safety of the murmur speaks to me.

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  3. Enjoyed this considerably, very edgy…
    …rob
    Image & Verse

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  4. anthony..merci

    oui...sandy..the safety of the murmur

    sara...merci & oui

    mercimerci...rob

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  5. a very beautiful murmur, the last two lines esp. entice! :D
    good one Mia.. :)

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  6. the power of a murmur, illustrated.

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  7. Wow...beautifully painted...in simple words...and the word "asphyxiated" consummate all the murmurs!

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  8. merci mojo... O. i like that.

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  9. bon jour sweet amity...merci...you've
    said so much to me...merci.

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  10. you are a bonbon dearest gale...merci.

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  11. the title drew me in as did your poem.

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  12. merci, tammie lee...sweet of you to say.

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  13. to find the murmur in the murmur!

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  14. oui...how beautiful that is...merci gabrielle.

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  15. Oh Mia this is wonderful. I just love your work.


    Melanie

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